College Admission Essay Examples Music

Last time a batch of college admissions essays leaked online, from Columbia University, everyone was embarrassed, mostly because they were forced to remember their own adolescent humblebrags disguised as thesaurus-fueled philosophizing. But it’s hard to feel bad for Kwasi Enin, the 17-year-old Long Island student who was accepted to every Ivy League school, and whose own essay is now public, thanks to the New York Post. It is very much a college essay — flowery language, Big Ideas, lessons learned — but it also worked.

Enin writes about his love of music — he plays violin, bass, and has a good voice, too — stretching the refined extracurricular into a story about leadership, community, and bringing joy to the world by singing and dancing in a production of Guys and Dolls. “Music has become the spark of my intellectual curiosity,” he writes. “I directly developed my capacity to think creatively around problems due to the infinite possibilities in music.” (Don’t be jealous.)

“The self-guided journey known as music in my life excites my mind every day,” Enin concludes neatly in his fifth paragraph. “My heart sings every day because the journey is already wonderful.” It’s well organized (by the numbers) and touching (sappy) — the guy, along with his 2,250 SAT score, is obviously going places. But the question remains: Why do we make kids do this to themselves?

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The proof is in the writing.

Kwasi Enin, a 17-year-old from Long Island, New York, made the news recently when he was accepted into all eight Ivy League schools.

Now, thanks to the New York Post, you can read the essay that made that possible.

Enin’s essay, “A Life In Music,” discusses his pastimes as a violist and singer. He talks about playing classical repertoire, singing doo wop, and performing as Big Jule in Guys and Dolls, saying that without music, “my life would not be half as wonderful as it is today.”

Enin traces his happiness to his decision not to take a simple music appreciation course in order to meet his state’s music requirement. By electing instead to take an orchestra course, Enin writes that “music [became] the spark of my intellectual curiosity,” helping him apply what he learned studying music to literature and mathematics.

Enin’s essay is a stirring argument for the importance of music education in a young person’s life. While he wants to go pre-med as an undergraduate, it’s clear that the impact music has had on his life is a positive and lasting one.

You can read the full text of the essay below.

Kwasi Enin’s college essay by New York Post

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